24 Ekim 2010 Pazar
Compare and Contrast Pharagraph About Films
At first,these films are about life.Both of them told difficulties.Angela's Ashes told about budgetary troubles but The Miracle Worker was establised on physical defects.Secondly,They expressed the time when the children growing.Helen who was blind and deaf had a wild attitudes because of her lacks,however Franki was a good child,took care of his brothers and his family.Films show that life is really hard if we have lacks.Actually,the miracle worker proves that we can handle with troubles even if people don't believe us.No matter how hard people can touch with each other and so they overcome these difficulties.I think Angela's Ashes is better film.It is closer the life and poverty and misery are showed effectively.However,we learn one thing that teach us "if we breathe,there is always hope"
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Hi friend!
YanıtlaSilyour paragraph will be better if you add a topic sentence.you started with a transition.your general idea should be in the beginning of paragraph.Apart from this it is good.see you:)
Hi Seda!
YanıtlaSilyour paragraph was written convincingly and wronglessly. But, if you wrote a topic sentence it would be better. Otherwise, everything is good.
Well Done!
seda,there is not a topic sentence . ıf you add a topic sentence , ıt will be good.I also liked your conclusion.
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